Tyler's movie Reviews on Newgrounds

[Derpasaurus Rex]

"AWFUL. ZERO STARS."

Is the opposite of what I feel about this short. Good job fellaz! ;]

FrozenFire responds:

Thanks babe ;D

[The Freelance Police]

Nice job, I see you have been improving. While I smikred once or twice, I can't say I laughed, but you're going in the right direction.

My biggest complaint is the drawing- their proportions are so odd and pudgy. I also wish their hands had fingers instead of being the little mittens that they are. Those rectangle eyes bother me too, they feel strange. I think from you news post you know and acknowledge that you have drawing issues to improve on, so keep at it. I mean I have plenty of drawing problems myself (im not trying to bash, just give criticism and hopefully help).

The coloring is nice; im really fond of that look. However, it seemed the same all the time, whether the characters were inside or outside, the lighting always seemed to be the same hardness (for lack of better word). There is no sense of the light changing. I think the super saturated colors and shading is something thats happening a lot lately in more flash toons, but colors don't always need to pop so much, sometimes subtle works better in certain situations.

Anyway im not trying to be a critical asshole or anything, im just trying to give feedback. Hopefully this review helps you somehow. Good luck with your future cartoons!

Twisted4000 responds:

Yeah about the mittens thing, you'll notice you see them a lot more often towards the beginning of the video, mainly because I really just couldn't draw hands very well then. I still can't really now, but towards the ending parts I got a better sense of hand anatomy (since while I was making this I was constantly practicing in the mean time). And yeah I do like vibrant colors. I know I'm kinda sucky at shading though ha ha :P but anyways I'm glad it was tolerable.

[New Eden - Pilot]

Not to my taste, but the voices, humor and story seemed alright. The art was very well done, and I think that is what shines the most here.

However, the animation was pretty horrid. Yes, on a technical side of things, the animation was smooth and consistant, but it was also dull, lifeless and moved unrealistically. First off, take it easy with the motion blur. Every single action had an obnoxious blur; either use it more discreetly or not at all. The lip syncing was whack, it was very clearly just layered over the face independently, making it feel unnatural. Everything was also tweened or puppet-tooled, which isn't necessarily a bad thing, but it does look cheap.

The actions the characters went through are not natural motions, it looked as though they moved just for the sake of moving instead of carrying and relating to the acting of each character. I feel that in trying to be technically perfect, you lost a feeling of realism in the characters. Everything moves far too fast and unnaturally. The body pieces you used need some variety too. Work on those things and your series here will look so much better.

The special effects looked nice though, might I add.

I'm not trying to come off as mean with my criticism, just trying to help.

NewEdenseries responds:

Hey Tyler, thanks for taking the time to respond mate, appreciate you putting so much thought into it. All help is welcome.

[I Want Waffles]

From this moment on I will say "sangwich" instead of sandwich until THE DAY I DIE.

I thought it was cute, also.

MindChamber responds:

Ha,thanks

[Not so Happy Ending]

The massaging of the fat rolls really turned me o- I mean was pretty funny.

Jae responds:

Hahhahaa niiice

[Red]

Pretty good job. It's annoying seeing people complain and chastise you about the filesize, and unfortunately thats probably the way its going to be for a while until people realize different files beyond .swfs can be uploaded to newgrounds.

Anyway, the modeling was pretty good. I think you animated the emotion nicely, but the face was a bit too cartoony to take seriously. Not because you didn't do a good job, just the way it was proportioned. Music was very fitting, but some of the sounds, like the mouth opening, sighs, and gunshots were pretty awkward sounding. But other than that, good job man.

Iznvm responds:

thanks sir.. Im gunna continue hounding people back when they complain to anyone using the mp4 player about file size...
There's a ton of stuff I need to learn and practice mainly with facial expressions and rigging.. in the future, hopefully I'll be able to express more emotions through my characters=)

[DrumParadise]

Your stuff has been getting better somewhat. The content after color was introducted felt as though it were randomly placed. The little conflict at the beginning was kind of interesting, but then the audience never sees it again after you introduce video game characters and other whacky stuff. I felt like those things at the end really detracted from the beginning.

The animation in the beginning was better too, it could stand to have some more frames and cleaner linework though.

Hope that helps.

YouriX responds:

Thanks for taking the time to review my work Tyler :). I was going for a random like animation and a sudden use of color. Maybe if i somehow introduced the colors it would have felt more natural. Also i will try using more inbetween frames and cleaner lines.
Again thanks for the review :)

[Demo Reel 2012]

What school are you applying to?

Anyway, your traditional pieces (pencil and paper) were miles better than any of the digital/flash art. I think the software is really limiting you right now, and it might be better to submit an all traditional reel since it seems to be more to your strength.

You had a lot of line inconsistencies and perspective issues with your flash stuff, too. If you wanted to submit more flash work, you might do better to animate (or at least draw some frames) and scan them in.

Good luck man

DillonBrannick responds:

I live in Ireland, so I'm applying to IADT and BCFE, probably took more care on traditional ones, plus I do find it easier to draw on paper. Unfortunately I don't have enough traditional stuff to fill a demo reel.
Some of the stuff is quite rushed, well most of it so that's why there are quite a few inconsistencies. I needed to get it done because I have to work on the rest of my portfolio and a demo reel isn't a requirement into any of the animation courses, so its just something a little extra to stand out a bit more.
Yeah I probably should do my line tests on paper and then just ink 'em on the computer.
Well I loved this review, super helpful and I'll be sure to take what you've said on board.